92,070 Words

I've finished the re-write and given it to my mum with instructions to be brutally honest. In particular, I wanted to know:

• Is it always clear who's speaking to whom?
• Are there any continuity errors or parts of the plot that otherwise make no sense?
• Are there passages that digress too far from the story and ought to be cut?
• Is it all just too depressing?

I'll post her verdict in full.